Relationships is one of the most important parts of our lives. It affects our free times, way of thinking, choices that we made and a lot of other things. some people think that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past, others disagree. In my view, the extended family is less important now for the following reasons.
First, people live in separate homes now. in the past, many people lived together in a big house and as a result, they had a close relationship with their extended families like grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles. nevertheless, nowadays, people live in an apartment and so they have an independent life. For example, I remember that when I was a child, we lived with my grandparents and uncles in a big house. the house was really beautiful and all of us were happy but there were some problems such as conflicts between the two families was prevalent. My parent didn't have enough freedom to do what they want. After a couple of the years, we moved to Qazvin which is the town that we are settled. We have our own lives and we are free to do whatever we want.
Second, with the advent of technology, humans are going to act like machines. With all of the work and busy day, we must do our work and we have not enough time to spend with the extended family. For instance, I study in a university and I have a lot of tasks to do and even I find some free time, I prefer to relax and hang out with my friends and have some fun with them. I rarely find time to come over to my grandparents or uncles.
In sum, I think that recently the extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important, not only people live in separate homes now, but also with the advent of technology, humans are going to act like machines and I think that it is necessary for current society.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- TOEFL T P O 15 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, really, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42058823529 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50442342231 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6993984395 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4117647059 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244483985849 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815926585608 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857836599961 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163882588383 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567594578484 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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