Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether advertisements make products seem much better than they really are aroused much controversy among people with different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that the reality of products is not similar to their advertisements while others have a negative attitude toward this idea. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the former group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that the manufacturers want to make money. Therefore, they manipulate some professionals from the advertising industry to help them buy more products. Advertisers change the truth of the goods to attract more customers. For example, they usually use some visual effects and a tricky technique to make the advertisement more appealing and interesting. With this way, they persuade the audiences and readers to buy these products while when they purchase them, they realize this product is different from what they see in an advertisement.
In approaching this issue apart from the point stated before, another reason that deserves some words is that sometimes a customer has unreasonable wants. They purchase everything they see in TV commercial although this good might not be suitable for them. Then, they complain about it everywhere, how advertisements deceive them. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. Last summer, my friend buy a dress under the influence of its advertisement on TV, however, the dress was not fit her and she was so depressed. The main problem was her excessive weight, not an advertisement, this dress, without doubt, was appropriate for the normal weight person.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments above, I am of the opinion that the products which advertise seem better than their reality because advertisers change them by special techniques to make them fascinating for shoppers. Furthermore, sometimes customers have unwise demands from the product while this product might not suitable for them, so, a person concludes what she sees on TV commercial was different from her purchase.
- TPO 43 Independent Writing Task Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wait un 76
- Computers vs. traditional school 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Most businesspeople are motivated only by the desire for more money 83
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours Use spec 71
- TPO 28 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, while, apart from, for example, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31142857143 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95827997461 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4866021448 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.352941176 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248293746704 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793525681176 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662990532631 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164820157597 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887979225659 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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