Thanks to the advancement in the medical department, people are living longer than ever before. Although some feel that they should spend more time now in their offices, I, however, believe if you have enough money to satisfy your needs, longer working life is not needed.
Firstly, generally, grandparents act as a role model for their grandchildren. So, they tend to apprise them with the moral values which might help them in the long run. While I concede that caretakers can also inculcate these cognitive skills into the children, grandparents have a special bonding with them as they have blood relation. In addition, by spending more time with their grandchildren, grandparents can reduce the chances of mishappening. Hence, seniors require more at home than in the office.
Another reason why senior citizens should no longer work is that they have already done lots of work before retirement. Participating in recreational activities, they might contribute more to society. Not only does it help them to pass their time, but also gives them satisfaction. For example, in Australia, many non-profitable organizations are running by the people over 70’s.
However, despite the arguments above, I do concede that longer workforce is required in order to help the family financially. For instance, if the basic needs of a family is more than the salary of their sole earner, then aged persons must work in the office even after retirement. Therefore, to support the family, longer working life is necessary.
In conclusion, I would say that longer workforce is required if the family is unable to fulfill their basic necessities, aged people should spend their time with their children.
- People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Some say that advertisements of toys and snacks have a huge impact on children and their parents and therefore advertising to children should be banned Do you agree or disagree with the statement Give your own opinion 56
- The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? 78
- Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids.Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this 82
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...t work longer is that they have already did lots of work before retirement. Partici...
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Line 4, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ily, longer working life is necessary. In conclusion, I would say that longer w...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...if the family is unable to fulfil their basic necessities, aged people should spend their time wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18248175182 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76147169659 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587591240876 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6151486177 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169725219402 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585975311921 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672281067499 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11253163746 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644484276509 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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