TOEFL TPO 37 integrated writing question
The reading passage discusses several criticisms about the turtle excluder device or TED, incorporated in nets, which allows turtles to escape from the net in which trapped through a passage. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by the reading passage.
First, the author argues that the number of turtles caught by each shrimper is rare, So it is not cost-effective for shrimpers to use TED device which helps not only turtles but also shrimps to run away from the net. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that if we take all boats into account, it will lead us to the fact that thousands of turtles are endangered every time. Thus, it will cause harm to the turtle population, which is already rare and scarce.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that alternative methods can be used for saving these species, for example, enforcing the time limit, which shrimpers can keep their nets under water. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that since the number of shrimpers is high, it is not possible to monitor each boat in the sea to identify whether they are following the time limit rule. It is more efficient for them to use TED and check each boat before going for the catch.
Finally, the reading passage asserts that as some kinds of turtles have large bodies, the current TED device is not appropriate for helping them, and they will trap in the net. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that if in some areas this problem occurred, they can modify the TED's design and use the larger one, So the TED still will have its functionality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 288.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76388888889 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40787032586 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569444444444 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.4392402913 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.2 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 7.06452816374 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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