Heroes are not an ordinary man at a right place and a right time, but right men and women at a wrong place and a wrong time. Heroes make tough choices normal men can’t , heroes make great sacrifice though they can choose otherwise. Heroes are people with greater capacity and make bitter choices in the time of need.
When your neighbor faces a bad time, fire scorching neighborhood, ill-faith people holding a firearm, ultimate sacrifice will be made and his ascension to herohood concludes. People can’t distinguish heroes from the herd, only when the time is bad, evil on the rise, true hero can make a tougher choice. A choice unwise, irrational in everyday context, but heroic at the moment of truth. A sacrifice of one, can benefit thousands who did not. When very ordinary man facing high tide of fate, losing a life, damaging a body’s health, why should he be expected to act? Submission to death, forever lost of a limb, an ordinary man would never give up willingly, or be laughed at as fools for the remainder of his life. But a hero will choose death.
Not everyone can be a heor. Just like the old times, Hellenic champions travel the seven seas, completing quests for Goddesses on the top of Olympus. Saving a land from foreign invaders, expelling monstrosity from farmlands. Everyone wants to be a hero, but an ordinary mortal won’t have a chance when facing a force of nature. When a scientist worked in the Manhattan project, he used his full strength to separate 2 50lb uranium bars. If nobody chose to act, a critical reaction will be triggered and everyone inside the facility would be vaporized. 100lb seems to be light, but the bars were heavy, dense and hot, not everyone can hold them tightly and steadily for a few minutes.
We always hope everyone can be a hero, any parents, grandparents, your neighbor Joe and Jesse can one day save the world or at least a family. We hope they can make the “tougher” choice for us, so we won’t lose everything, or anything we value. But this is far too selfish, a true hero will never wait and let happen, denying our chance to prove later and salvation.
When we are sitting in a bystander or speculator’s seat, we always mumble “I can do it, if I was at his post.” But we hesitated, waited, and felt lucky we “did not.” This makes heroic deeds honorable forever, no ordinary man can substitute even at a good time and good place.
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- In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero. 33
- Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another. 70
- Most of the people we consider heroic today were, in fact, very ordinary people who happened to be in the right place at the right time. - GRE Issue 20 86
- You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late.Write a letter to your landlordwhy you are writing to himwhy you cannot pay the rentwhen you will pay the rent. 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...make tough choices normal men can't , heroes make great sacrifice though they...
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Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ifice though they can choose otherwise. Heroes are people with greater capacity and ma...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ary man facing high tide of fate, losing a life, damaging a body's health, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75058275058 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71288813509 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573426573427 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.81583266 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0476190476 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.21951772744 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218733490663 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620992117234 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658520641147 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127284075284 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521756355624 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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