There is no doubt that everyone desires to be successful. However, most people stay in their comfortable and familiar zones, reluctant to try new opportunities that may lead them to a high level of fulfillment. In contrary, excellent people try new things and take risks rather than only stay in their comfort zone.
Firstly, innovations come from trying different stuff, which is a significant factor for success. As we all know those most excellent companies in the internet industry, none of them came to success their without innovations. Google invented the Page Rank algorithm for its search engine; Facebook redefines social network; Apple refines its operating system every years. Another more concrete example is that Airbnb is now a successful IT company but also a great competitor in the hotel industry. Airbnb came out with a new idea for people to share accommodation more conveniently and economically. Airbnb did take many risks at the beginning, and it almost bankrupt, but eventually, after people accepted the theory of shared economy, Airbnb expanded all over the world.
Secondly, try new things is the only way to develop a personal style which is essential for the success in music and art areas. Musicians and artists may start their careers by imitating others' works. However, the remarkable success never comes from this only copy-paste strategy. Musicians and artists need to have a distinct style to let people remember them. For example, one of the greatest rock band, the Beatles, it is a pioneer in the rock and roll music. The members broke the limit of traditional rock and roll instruments by adopting many exotic instruments. They even use a sizeable orchestra band for some of their songs, which was very rare and crazy at that time. However, this own style which went beyond the stereotype of rock and roll music gave people a feeling of fresh and that lead to their legendary in the future.
Thirdly, sometimes taking risks is an unavoidable requirement for success, and it can be controlled to some extent. No one is perfect in the world. Even doing a small and simple thing, there still a risk that it will be failed. Although we can escape from risks, we can control them in a reasonable limit. Elon Mars, who is a CEO for several innovative companies including Tesla, SpaceX, is a master of trying out a creative idea and controlling risks. In SpaceX, he was trying to make the first recycle rocket in the world, and he had made the launch day public. However, the company encountered some problems in the development. After a serial of analyses, he decided to postpone the launch to reduce the risks. At first, people are ironical for the delay and thought that he might never succeed, but the company tackle the problems and finally launch the rocket successfully, and the whole world was boiling over.
In conclusion, staying in the comfort zone is the greatest enemy of success. We should try our best to take new opportunities and control the risk on our way to success.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do?-Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wai 98
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...e is that Airbnb is now a successful IT company but also a great competitor in the hote...
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Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bankrupts'?
Suggestion: bankrupts
...y risks at the beginning, and it almost bankrupt, but eventually, after people accepted ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2518.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91796875 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65217690933 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52734375 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0619310708 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9285714286 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82142857143 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170980971032 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444397010055 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532677214954 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103607145312 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344065236543 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.