TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r
Whithout a shadow of the doubt, having a good job plays a vital role in the individual's improvement and developmen. By having a good job we can make more money and be a confident person. Many people contend that it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobes, while others believe it is not. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actuaal observation of life have led me to agree that following out parents' job is a wise action. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount reason is that we live in a world that most of the people do not have a chance to get a good job. In this competitive world we have to grab the spoon. I mean by using our parents' experiences and following their road we can increase our chance in job hunting. Their experince not only assists us to obtain a good job but also we do not have to waste our tom to find a job. As a result, I think people can just choose jobs that are similar to thei parents' job.
Another point springing to mind is that our parents in their entire lives have many connections related to their jobs. These connections are our opportunities to obtain a job. We just have to improve our skils and abilities. The more we improve, the great we earn. By being an expert in a determined field and by having connections we are the people who occupy the jobs.
Although the mentioned reasons are the first ones cross to the mind as the benefits of choosing our parents' job, but there is a disadvantage, too. There is a possibility we do not have joy in our career, but by considering that making money is more important than joy in a job we can neglect this flaw. So, we just have to manage the situation and see the real world. So, by revaluating the situation we can understand that having a job is a very great opportunity.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see the benefits of choosing a job that it is similar to our parents' job. In this way, we just have to use their experiences and their connections to find a suitable job. As a result, there is no need to being worry about future and making money. I hope someday all the people all over the world can have jobs because without having a job they cannot follow their dreams or even buy stuff.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ng a good job plays a vital role in the individuals improvement and developmen. By having a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, i mean, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32214765101 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5084296022 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434004474273 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9810288482 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323808255468 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116700601803 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106194103306 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223349880638 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832950454809 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.