The argument states a recent sales study which shows that their is increase of 30% in the sales of the seafood in the bay city restaurants during the past five years. And states about the survey of the income and tries to show that new captain seafood restaurant should be quite popular and profitable. The argument made by the author is not convincing as there are many flaws in it.
The author states that their a increase in the consumption of the sea food in the bay city on basis of the recent sales study. But author has not told anything about the authenticity of the sales report or describing more about sales survey or who has conducted or what was the sample size, what sort of technology used by the people conducting survey.
The author states that there are no currently operating sea food speciality restaurants which shows that it is not necessary that people visiting the restaurants are solely because of their liking of the sea food. It might be case that because of the other genre of food their is increase in the consumption of the sea food. So this argument is questionable that because of the absence of any specialized sea food restaurant opening the sea food restaurant will be quite popular and profitable.
According to the passage the majority of the families in the city are two income families, author has not stated how he comes to know about the this idea. And on basis of this and nation wide survey he tries to prove that two income families tend to eat fewer home meals and go for the food outside than they used to do decade ago. Here the nation survey results can not be considered true as in nation wide survey there are large amount of people and we don't know about the percentage of the population in the nation. Suppose this result could be true for the area having high population but not for the bay city. And the survey is also states that majority of families tend to eat outside the home this could also result in the bad health as per the nation survey. So it might be the case that people stop eating outside the home after they are being affected by the infection or disease and prefer home food more.
On basis of the such assumptions author tries to say that it would be wise to open a specialised restaurant for sea food which would be both popular and profitable. But the above reasons shows that making such assumptions would be not right. Thus the arguments made by the author is not convincing. And it would be not preferred opening a new sea food restaurant on basis of this argument.
- TOEFL T P O 29 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2056 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.441 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.335 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.13 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...s a recent sales study which shows that their is increase of 30% in the sales of the ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 24, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...laws in it. The author states that their a increase in the consumption of the se...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n it. The author states that their a increase in the consumption of the sea ...
^
Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sumption of the sea food in the bay city on basis of the recent sales study. But ...
^^
Line 6, column 272, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...that because of the other genre of food their is increase in the consumption of the s...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...s not stated how he comes to know about the this idea. And on basis of this and nation w...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 181, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...the this idea. And on basis of this and nation wide survey he tries to prove that two incom...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 397, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...esults can not be considered true as in nation wide survey there are large amount of people...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 432, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...s in nation wide survey there are large amount of people and we dont know about the pe...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 456, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...there are large amount of people and we dont know about the percentage of the popula...
^^^^
Line 12, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...taurant for sea food which would be both popular and profitable. But the above re...
^^
Line 12, column 244, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ng such assumptions would be not right. Thus the arguments made by the author is not...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, then, thus, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54329004329 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36473520753 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.383116883117 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4737082183 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.611111111 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38888888889 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185163355634 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712470937226 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108098417106 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12799764356 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104284285004 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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