The article states that the communal online encyclopedias might seem attractive but, it has several problems which made it less valuable and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor of the lecture explains that these reasons are not perfect and emphasize the idea.
First, the reading states that the communal online encyclopedia often lacks of academic credentials as they are treated as inaccurate. But, the professor refutes this point by stating that the traditional encyclopedia also has errors and mistakes. Moreover, he states that those errors on the traditional printed encyclopedia remain unedited for decades.
The article claims that the data of online encyclopedia might be fabricated, deleted or corrupted by hackers. But, the lecture opposes this point by saying that online encyclopedia uses different kinds of protection. Furthermore, he states that there is a read-only version which prevents users to change it. He also states that there are special editors who constantly supervise the changes and prevent unwanted editions.
Third, the reading avers that online encyclopedia only contains popular topics in a trivial manner. But, the lecture criticizes traditional encyclopedia by stating that as it has limited spaces, the academic only includes important things and sometimes, the author’s interest influence the encyclopedia. He also states that the online encyclopedia has the diversity of data everyone has access to it. He pointed out it as a great advantage of the online encyclopedia.
In Sun, the author of the reading states three reasons for the disadvantage of the online encyclopedia and the lecture successfully refutes it.
- Essay topics: TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task 73
- agree or disagree: Teachers should not make their political or social views know to students in classroom. 60
- People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Universities should require students to take courses only within those fields they are interested in studying. 50
- TOEFL T P O 16 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a trivial manner" with adverb for "trivial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cyclopedia only contains popular topics in a trivial manner. But, the lecture criticizes traditiona...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61328125 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96683480576 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50390625 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9472634764 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.642857143 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06452816374 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204400948008 0.272083759551 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876846088048 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508250300131 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127287232839 0.162205337803 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422004914858 0.0443174109184 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 53.8541721854 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.2367328918 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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