Become a doctor, nurse, or other medical professional typically requires years of training. Why do you think some people choose to become a medical professional?
Medical and related professions are one of the most important occupations of a community. Two groups of people are attracted to this discipline, first, people who love to help people and creatures, and another group of interest in high salaries and attraction of popular respect, which is most of them will face on many problems if they don’t follow their dreams.
First, those who love their jobs are more successful people, and they can also help people and creatures more. Like Professor Noel Fitzpatrick, he is a famous Veterinar who is a life-saving treatment, and compassion to make a whole new level of surgery. these programmes feature some of the most complex veterinary challenges ever seen, with some techniques and implants not available anywhere else in the world. Professor Noel Fitzpatrick and his staff as they find extraordinary and creative solutions to save life, bringing hope and peace to the pet families which are members of the families. For example, 3 years ago, my 2 years old dog got stabbed while we took him to the clinic its blinding too much and his body got cold. Noel Fitzpatrick immediately started a surgery for one and half hours and saved his life. For all my life I'm thankful of him.
Second, People who enter this profession due to high salaries of medical titles usually get sooner tired than others. But that students who are love their job are enjoying all moments to help other people at work. For example, Nurses Make a Real Difference. they save lives every day. a registered nurse earns high salaries. in addition, they work with interesting people, significantly affect people’s lives, often even saving their lives. i should say as a nurse, not one day looks the same. Each day involves meeting different patients with various health concerns. And the moment the patient gets better and gets out of the hospital with a huge smile is a great pleasure for medical team. For example, 6 months ago, I had a 5 years old patient who had a bad accident and her hand was stocked between door because front of the car was damaged. I as a paramedic nurse couldn’t help her alone, therefore we called fire station to help us. After that, we took her and her mother to the nearest hospital. After 2 hours, surgery team saved her hand. In all period of her hospitalization, she trusted on me and called me kind aunt and, she left the hospital very happy because she enjoyed all the moments there. This is nurses' job to be trustful and kind to prepare a peaceful place for all ages who needs my help.
In conclusion, the work of medical and nursing is very interesting and exciting, and I know that as a person who graduated from nursing school and my sister is a doctor, this field requires much patience and interests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78215767635 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63103997375 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56846473029 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5474399114 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.28 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0905392312309 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0236671110227 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286782731 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0643801630529 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180191341868 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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