Theories about risk-taking personality
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Integrated task
The lecture's subject is the changes that have been on the knowledge about risk-taking personality, and the professor explain them by comparing an article written seventy years ago and the present theories about the topic.
He says that nowadays psychologists have a more tolerant position and they don't think anymore that it only exists a universal risk-taking personality, instead, they make a diference between risk-takers and suicidals. The first kind of people, although the writter of the article don't think so, obtain rewards for their actions, chemical, physical and psychological reward, in addition they take risk because they consider they can do it without bad consecuences. Tha professor uses the example of the motorbike riders, because they know that they have skills and experience enogh to do what they do.
In the other hand, there are people, who take unnecesary risks and in the article's writer opinion it would not be a risk-taker, for example the smokers, who know that what they do is unhealthy, but they do anyway.
In the professor's opinion, the difference sould not be between if the risk is good for the rest of the people or no, he believes that the difference is between the people who hurt themeselves intentionally (smokers) and yhe ones who try not to do it or do it unintentionally (Motorbike riders).
In conclusion, the professor thinks that the old definition of the risk-taking personality is no longer adequate and he states the one he considers more precise.
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Sentence: The lecture's subject is the changes that have been on the knowledge about risk-taking personality, and the professor explain them by comparing an article written seventy years ago and the present theories about the topic.
Description: The fragment professor explain them is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, past tense
Sentence: He says that nowadays psychologists have a more tolerant position and they don't think anymore that it only exists a universal risk-taking personality, instead, they make a diference between risk-takers and suicidals.
Error: diference Suggestion: difference
Sentence: The first kind of people, although the writter of the article don't think so, obtain rewards for their actions, chemical, physical and psychological reward, in addition they take risk because they consider they can do it without bad consecuences.
Error: consecuences Suggestion: consequences
Sentence: Tha professor uses the example of the motorbike riders, because they know that they have skills and experience enogh to do what they do.
Error: enogh Suggestion: enough
Sentence: In the other hand, there are people, who take unnecesary risks and in the article's writer opinion it would not be a risk-taker, for example the smokers, who know that what they do is unhealthy, but they do anyway.
Error: unnecesary Suggestion: unnecessary
Sentence: In the professor's opinion, the difference sould not be between if the risk is good for the rest of the people or no, he believes that the difference is between the people who hurt themeselves intentionally smokers and yhe ones who try not to do it or do it unintentionally Motorbike riders.
Error: sould Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: themeselves Suggestion: themselves
Error: yhe Suggestion: the
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Score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Words: 249 250
No. of Characters: 1221 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.972 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.861 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.732 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.476 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.836 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.259 0.07
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