Unlike the negative perception toward ex-prisoners that highly entrenched in people's minds, they , however, can bring benefits to the society. i completely agree with the idea that holding a talk with such people is the best way to divert teenagers from crime.
In my opinion, a story from people that have real experience is much more compelling to students than a normal lecture. Reformed offenders can tell teenagers about many aspects of how they committed crimes as well as the feelings after receiving sentences and so on. Thus, this approach is more detailed as young people can learn about things that do not exist in textbooks. While adolescents are often obstinate and being indifferent to guidance of the older , the level of vivid and shocking truth about a criminal lifestyle spoken from real experience can strongly discourage from breaking the law.
Beside, there are many alternatives to educate teenagers about crime, but would be less effective. One most popular option would be a visit from police officers to talk about this topic. While this may be useful in terms of informing young people about types of crime , the sentences and the consequences, the youth is likely to have reluctant attitudes towards the advises of the authority , which makes it less efficient. Another option is educational film. It is great about bringing the real footage about a criminal life , but it is lack of interacting and can not give the answer to the questions of students.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.
- The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is to a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 78
- The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree? 78
- The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05494505495 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64240402907 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608058608059 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3328220835 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248282743819 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878995210531 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545255805927 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155697214704 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217363811584 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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