The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
As mentioned by author, Kensington Academy replaced their cafeteria management to a private sector, Swift Nutrition which serves low-fat and low-calorie meals and some of the students seem to be not liking the food. However, If students bring their own food from home, food is likely to be more healthy as it won't have additional spices to make food tasty unlike outside vendors.
However, complaints of food by some students doesn't make it insipid food as we don't know what percentage of students actually liking the food or disliking the food. Without proper data, it would be improper to assert anything. Since, unanimity is seldom seen, the majority could be taken into consideration to make any decision.
Moreover, low-fat and low-calorie meals provided by Swift Nutrition will instead help the students develop the good food habits and will keep them healthy. Students who will have only the cafeteria food as an option will end up eating healthy food at cafeteria and gradually, they will start liking the food as well.
Students adjust themselves to the conditions and food they are dealing with. If such nutritious food is replaced with some delicious and unhealthy food, they might like it but the effects of it could be untoward.
Therefore, the continuing with Swift Nutrition is a good idea as it provides healthy, nutritious food and students can adopt it in their habit and can live a healthy lifestyle with better food habits. However, to keep the food healthy and students to be connected, Swift Nutrition can be suggested to provide wide variety of foods and which doesn't become boring and mundane food for them. Also, the data for satisfaction of students for food is also inadequate to make any decision and only a proper information could suggest some decision.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The essay is out of topic. This is not an issue essay but an argument essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1458 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.844 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.525 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.005 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.674 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
As mentioned by author, Kensington Academy replaced their cafeteria managem...
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Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...erves low-fat and low-calorie meals and some of the students seem to be not liking the food...
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Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... meals and some of the students seem to be not liking the food. However, If students bring th...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...er, complaints of food by some students doesnt make it insipid food as we dont know wh...
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Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...dents doesnt make it insipid food as we dont know what percentage of students actual...
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Line 9, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...provide wide variety of foods and which doesnt become boring and mundane food for them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04713804714 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57283564821 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3311120779 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.916666667 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123569790399 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622622510175 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983285553322 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085626148568 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810083902433 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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