During the past year, workers at our newly opened factory reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries. Panoply produces products very similar to those produced at our factory, but its work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents. Panoply's superior safety record can therefore be attributed to its shorter work shifts, which allow its employees to get adequate amounts of rest.
In the argument the author concludes that the work shifts should be shortened to avoid the higher rate of on-the-job accidents. At first glance, the writer’s argument seems convincing to certain extent. However, with closer look, there seems to be some flaws in their line of reasoning.
First of all, the arguer says that the nearby Panoply’s workers comparatively have 30 percent less on-the-job accidents. He tries to prove that his factory should learn something from Panoply. The author falsely assumes that the presented 30 percent lower rate means less on-the-job accidents in Panoply. H...
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- During the past year, workers at our newly opened factory reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries. Panoply produces products very similar to those produced at our factory, but its work shifts are one hour sh 81
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2073 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.479 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.619 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.576 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e, if the arguers' factory has far less workers than the Panoply, while there w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33009708738 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82593909277 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4157254097 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38095238095 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218681385937 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700695040505 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525229555771 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108695454376 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498201759503 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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