The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by lordwind on Thu, 08/29/2019 - 12:36

The pie graph illustrates how many percentage of the average household expenditures such as housing, transport, food, health care, other goods and services in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

Overall, Malaysia spent more money in housing which was by far the largest percentage of all sectors, while health care was a category that people in both country did not pay much attention to spending.

A glance to the chart provided reveals that Japanese show more their interest in other goods and services, the figure for this was 29%, which was 3% higher than that of Malaysia. However, housing was different since Malaysia held first rank, making it become the largest percentage (34%).

On the other hand, although Japan had two sectors as transport and health care, which were also twice as much as that of Malaysia, they spent less money in food than Malaysia. It had only 24%, compare to 27% of Malaysia in food.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun percentage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many percentages'.
Suggestion: many percentages
The pie graph illustrates how many percentage of the average household expenditures s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 772.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98064516129 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38582354885 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638709677419 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.012577124 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.666666667 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.23603664747 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150758728945 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789735941834 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578145046764 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977232758441 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655866213107 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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