TPO 7
Teaching techniques in schools are becoming more challenging these days. Because of the fact that knowledge acquiring has become easier. In addition, sources of gaining information has been diverged. However, the most famously known argument regarding this matter is wether understanding concepts is more important for students or knowing facts. In my opinion, learning facts is outweighed by grasping concepts.
One significant reason, in my perspective, is realizing the root of the facts; to be able to explain them well. In other words, giving separate facts would be challenging for beginner learners to abstract the cause. Teaching concepts, on the other hand, would facilitate the process of perceiving those facts. For instance, knowing about different chemicals reactions is way different than explaining the core of this reaction. Students have to acknowledge this causative to be able to understand more about the chemical reaction; then apply it to new chemicals accordingly by knowing the structure. Under no circumstance would students be able to differentiate between those reactions without knowing the main factor.
As of an equal importance to the previous reason, is implying concepts in students lives. Since understanding concepts would expand their horizon to different perspective, It would enable them to pursue the concept they believe in; and behave accordingly. Take eco-friendly products as an example. If they realize the concept behind it, they would adopt it through every single aspect not only one product as a fact of being preserving the environment. In fact, this is what I did myself in such a matter. I started to notice every aspect of helping to solve the global warming issue and try to adopt it. If I had not have known about the cornerstone of this issue, I would not have applied it through different angles.
To put it briefly, there are many arguments on what is the best for students to learn. Personally, I believe understanding concepts is way important than facts due to the fact that they would realize the main cause. In addition, they would get the opportunity to adopt those concepts through their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e becoming more challenging these days. Because of the fact that knowledge acquiring ha...
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Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: Because
...e becoming more challenging these days. Because of the fact that knowledge acquiring has become easier. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... significant reason, in my perspective, is realizing the root of the facts; to be able to ex...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...nt chemicals reactions is way different than explaining the core of this reaction. S...
^^^^
Line 9, column 619, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...issue and try to adopt it. If I had not have known about the cornerstone of this iss...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, briefly, however, if, regarding, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.265129683 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86699343476 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527377521614 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8519884995 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5238095238 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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