Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Many underdeveloped countries nowadays face serious problems trying to provide their citizens with decent education and health facilities, as well as in other areas like trade.
However, I disagree that developed nations ought to support these countries, and think they should try to stand on their own feet instead.
It is usually possible for poor countries to raise enough money to overcome their predicaments since the source of their shortcomings is usually deep corruption and domestic mismanagement , which have resulted in their funds being embezzled by
dishonest officials and their affairs in areas like education, health and trade run by unqualified authorities. If they are in need of support in such areas, they should first make an effort to eradicate the abovementioned issues before asking for aid from the outside world.
Furthermore, the money that the governments of developed countries have belongs to their citizens because it originates from their taxes, customs duties, and national resources. It should therefore be spent on providing better facilities like health centres and
universities, and improving business environments for their own citizens, not for people living elsewhere in the world.
Some may argue that the decline in living conditions in developing countries could result in the migration of their citizens to developed countries in search of a better life, which involves serious financial and cultural concerns for rich nations. However, public investment in improving border control and defense structures can render these concerns insignificant.
In conclusion, I think developed countries should not aid poor countries, as their funds should be invested in the betterment of life for their own citizens. Undeveloped nations can often overcome their shortcomings in commerce, health and education on their own through eliminating corrupt officials and improving their management practices.
- Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 73
- Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.To what extent do you agree or disagree 78
- Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish.Why do you think this is happening?What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? 73
- Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
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Suggestion:
...sulted in their funds being embezzled by dishonest officials and their affairs in...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dishonest
...ed in their funds being embezzled by dishonest officials and their affairs in areas li...
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Suggestion:
...etter facilities like health centres and universities, and improving business env...
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Suggestion: Universities
...r facilities like health centres and universities, and improving business environments fo...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... elsewhere in the world. Some may argue that the decline in living conditions i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7724137931 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95319590748 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565517241379 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7213256972 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.4 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187832468959 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882252222776 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300184605356 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098085124867 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344718495486 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.0946893788 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.78 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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