Some people argue that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believe that some improper human activities such as hunting rare animals have largely affect both nature and those creatures’ living. There has been a heated debate on whether should human spend too much money, time and etc. on protecting wild animal especially the rare one. From my perspective, protecting wild animals equals to protecting ourselves, so the government and every individual should join on it.
It is understandable for why some people disagree to invest too much resources on animals. Some countries spend lots of money to maintain the equipment so those rare species can be well protected. Also, laws have been established to ban cruel abuse or murdering of animals. Children are taught to identify and rescue wild species from textbooks from a young age. But, when conservation campaigns are under way, there are still people starving and being deprived of basic sanitary conditions around the world. Lots of disadvantaged group need help urgently, so for many people, it is justified that people’s wellbeing should play the priority role instead of rare animal conservation.
However, the nature and the food chain are more fragile than people think. A hard truth is that the disappearance of wild animals, especially endangered species, might trigger some problems. A kind of insects’ disappearance may cause flowers, herbivore, and its predator become extinct. They are so closely connected that even one of sector be destroyed may cause to the destruction of the whole, and human beings obviously, are the ultimate victims.
In conclusion, I think preserving wild animals is necessary, since the destroy and damage for them will finally affect ourselves in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: peopled
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, well, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32352941176 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88890826816 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636029411765 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5536527269 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210641546066 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070046372964 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749479330727 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113449437397 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635205086438 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.