Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better ( for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why? – limiting the types of television programs and movies their children can watch. – spending more time talking with their children. – supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends.
Throughout history, children have played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, researchers have always searched many ways for enhancing growing children condition. Some young people suggest tress hypotheses for this purpose such as selecting TV program and film which suitable for children age to watch with parents, consuming more time with their offspring, and checking their children when they play with their friends. I content that supervising on TV programs and movies is more important than other options. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that children have strong intense for watching movies and TV programs. To elaborate on my points, since children spend much time at home, they tend to watch TV and movies. Children who are between 5 - 10 years old are so sensitive, and they want to follow and imitate to other people so that TV program would have a right influence on them. In this situation, offspring tend to follow heroes in the film. In this situation, fathers and mothers must be sensitive and accurate to choose films and TV programs which their children want to see them. These films must be suitable for children's' age until they make a positive and beneficial effect on children's' behavior. If offspring watch a film that not proper for them, it would have a drawback result on children's attitude such as becoming aggressive, anxiety, anger, and depress. Therefore, parents must be supervising on films and TV programs that children watch.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that choosing a proper and suitable film or TV program can improve children's' manner and abilities. To shed more light on this matter, some films and TV programs are specially made for children until offspring can improve mental ability and IQ. Parents must be select these programs for improving children's' ability and life skill like improving self-confidence and social interaction. For example, many Children's TV programs try to show to offspring how to solve their programs or how to deal with them. Also, many other TV programs learn children the same arduous lesson like mathematics and physics in the films and playing form. Therefore, parents with choosing proper TV programs and Film would improve their children behavior, and they become a prosperous person in future.
All in all, considering all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that parents with supervising films and TV programs which children tend to see them would improve offspring's' behavior. I believe that selecting a proper TV program not only can prevent some negative behavior but also can improve social and mental abilities.
- Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past 73
- TOEFL TPO 47 - Integrated Writing Task 81
- TPO 33 78
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The most important way to improve people s health is to clean the environment 45
- TPO 23 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 21, column 817, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...or, and they become a prosperous person in future. All in all, considering all th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23937360179 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67517548865 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472035794183 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7013675279 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.523809524 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237253250416 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942012784713 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497735910626 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172210575451 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209583695685 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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