Abdication from position would be taken seriously into account when it comes to important fields such as business, politics, education or government. There are many reasons that we should put business in different category from education, government or politics since the leadership is not kept in five years restrain that is applied in those fields. The leader from business needs to possess experiences in order to lead the company to right way. Government, politics and education, on the other hand, restrain leader in five year in activity.
Revitalization is not certain path to lead to success, success become reality when enterprise know how to catch oppotunity based on the available advantages. It is rife of risks when one abdicates from position and pursue own interest. Building own enterprise needs a lot of effort, strong financial support, and good leadership in order to make it thrive. The result is inevitable when many entrepreneurs fail in their own business. Leaders in business is irrefutable important so the abdication from position is only taken into consideration only if leader's ability is not compatible to the company or reader's performance does not match company's expectation from leadership. The more leader hold control of the company, the more experience that leader gain through their career. Apple is high-reputation company with strong leadership that everyone know, Steve Job was the first leader of the company and the person who lead the company to success due to his strong management. When Steve Job was overlooked by the board in his own company, apple faced a lot of down turn since the leave of Steven Job.
However, leader in fields such as government, politics, education are regarded to the both their performance when they take position and five years restrain from their election. Five years is not always the case when the candidates from election have great performance throughout their career as a politician or governer for example. Begin leadership in different field would be unidealistic when they are used to the way that particular field works. President who majored from law abdicated the position and start his or her own business, it is even harder for them due to lack of knowledge about market or finance. Person with strong and efficient leadership can last longer than five years when they are elected again by the population. Stepping down from position would be taken into consideration when they don't prove sufficient ability in their job or their management bring less efficacy than their counterpart.
In conclusion, leader shouldn't step down from field unless their hold of power reach the restrain. Every fields have common criteria about how leadership would fit the position and how they step down once their ability would not match the needs from those fields. However, in business five years is not a restrain when it comes to leadership. It is slightly different in fields such as politics, education, government when leadership have to step down after five year since their election.
- Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. 50
- Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 813, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d be taken into consideration when they dont prove sufficient ability in their job o...
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Line 6, column 24, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...counterpart. In conclusion, leader shouldnt step down from field unless their hold ...
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Line 6, column 87, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... field unless their hold of power reach the restrain. Every fields have common criteria abou...
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Line 6, column 101, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...their hold of power reach the restrain. Every fields have common criteria about how l...
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Line 6, column 305, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... However, in business five years is not a restrain when it comes to leadership. It is slig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 12.9106741573 256% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17907444668 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74725779596 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442655935614 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9001731957 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5909090909 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199126648208 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686633702212 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576483481669 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142679840149 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545276196312 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.