Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
it is obvious that every culture is a complex of various element, and consists of singing, dancing, plays, etc. Although some people might adhere to the idea that dancing palys a prominent role in cultures, others possess the conviction that its function is not very essential. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the role of dancing cannot be neglected in cultures. I will develop my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To start with, one should take into account that dancing helps the culture of a country not to be forgotten. Since dancing has symbols which represent the cultural signs of a society, by performing a special dance, people will remember their cultural and historical signs. An example would account for this fact: there is a ritual dance in my country, in which people gather around a fire at the end of the winter, performing dance and sing traditional songs to remember how our ancestors used to celebrate the emerging of the spring. they raise their hands to the sky and wave them to ask for rain, jump on top of the fire to show they are fearless, stand around the fire holding hands to demonstrate the fact that they always get eachother’s back. In this way, they celebrate the firsr day of the spring season.
another noteworthy reason that should be mentioned is that the main function of dancing is to bring people together and fortify a nation’s union by dance. Moreover, dancing is a social event and by being perfodrmed, people from different parts oh the country will come together, regardless of their race and cultural differences. Not only they enjoy the activity and have a good time, but also feel closer to one another after that. Additionally, not to mention that every socity contains many subcultures and their people have disticnt characteristics from each other. As a result, dancing is a way that these people will share a same activity. Therefoe, they will be more motivated to feel sympathy and loyalty to their country and nation. For instance, every year a dance festival holds in Brasil, and people all around the world go there to be a part of this event. it is not far from the imagination that the more they have nice time there, the more they get motivated to communicate with others. Finally, they will find many similarities among themselves and learn more about other nations.
To wrap it up, I do believe that dancing plays undeniable role in every culture because it keeps the history of a nation alive and makes people to be united with each other. Had the dance would have been removed from cultures, humanity would missed a great chance to express his feeling and values through the time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, so, for instance, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81681034483 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58785059117 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528017241379 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0278672342 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0626562347722 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0217449146278 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023579102008 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0395787446217 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148649877305 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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