Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is not a secret that people consider their future job as something that they are going to be successful at it. As far as I am concerned, study hard at school overcomes the importance of social skills. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, many careers, especially those are related to science do not require a high level of people skills, which means it is more reasonable to put effort into a hard study in school. Successful occupation in many fields depends on the expertise of the person. In addition, the knowledge needed for a job could not be obtained without hard work and dedication. For example, having a lifetime job as a tenured professor in Neurobiology is a desirable occupation in the academic area. An eminent neuroscientist should be highly educated and experienced to possess an excellent position as a chair professor in a well-known university. In another word, it does not matter how she is dealing with her colleagues, as long as her research leads to a breakthrough in science, and elevates the university’s credit. This situation could be applied in several successful jobs.
Furthermore, by being assiduous at school, the person will be more competent and competitive in the job market, because he has the specialization for high-ranked positions. In the modern era, technological advances are happening rapidly, and the demand for skillfulness beats sociability. For instance, two years ago, Amazon Company announced that they are hiring people for a Machin Learning post with a high payment. For the job requirements mentioned in the application form, there were no refers to soft skills at all. A friend of mine applied for the job and was hired, although he could not get on well with people. As a result, the more a person is skilled in his field of study, the more job opportunities are available for him.
In conclusion, I think hard study in school matters more than just being nice to people. It is because many privileged vocations do not call for social interactions, and more job opportunities are available by profound knowledge at work, which is a result of great endeavors in the school.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94535519126 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03254565082 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551912568306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3484142141 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.555555556 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295192273741 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883783446998 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501401744116 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185709278152 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109079965578 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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