Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though there is a widely held notion that social skills are the most prominent characteristics for success in careers, I subscribe to the view that the knowledge and technical expertise bring about success in jobs. My reasons of support are organized as the following.
First of all, in every job, the payment to the worker is the result of a specific task; therefore, the more professional the employee performs that task, the higher salary he will receive. So, students in order to become expert in their future field, need to focus on their studying and choose their area of interest precisely by evaluating themselves in different subjects. For instance, I work in a company which provides electronic equipment for smart-home buildings. My job is to design various circuits and program the devices to work correctly, and I'm capable of carrying out these responsibilities due to my efforts in classes related to programming and electronic devices. Our consumers are convinced to buy our products because of their excellent functionality, not because of the way our company's salesmen advertise them. To this day, I don't recall a single customer buying our devices without checking their performance first and simply rely on our description of the product.
Second, there are many jobs in which no particular interaction with other people are required. Individuals who have selected these sort of careers are distinguished by the knowledge and the amount of information they have gained through their education
However, we shouldn't disregard the noticeable effects of good communication with others in various careers. An individual without the fundamental knowledge of social behavior will encounter significant problems in their adult life, especially in the workplace. Our purpose in this essay is exclusively the comparison between the importance of good education and proper interactions in future careers not undermining the essence of the second subject.
In conclusion, the fact that customers most of all care about the quality of the products or services they receive, and the quality is highly related to the workers expertise and education rather than social communication, and also the common careers which do not need much talking to others are sufficient to lead the reader t the conclusion that studying hard is more vital for success in future jobs than ability of relating to other people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32467532468 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9447306653 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3368272099 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.692307692 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6153846154 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176293491554 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055267235824 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052592660933 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934444805294 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567152276697 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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