You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.You do NOT need t

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

You do NOT need to write any address.

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Ms. Merlins (Principal of Horace Green School),

My name is Tracy and my family and I have recently moved to this wonderful town of Southampton, from New York. Having moved here and planned on settling down for several years to come, it is pertinent that my 15-year-old son continues his high school studies in a local school that is accessible to him.

More often than not, large towns such as Southampton have many good schools. However, my enquiry with the local community and relatives has convinced me that Horace Green is the most prestigious of educational institutions in the locality. Hence, I write to you requesting you to consider my son for the upcoming round of admissions.

To say the least, my son is an outstanding student in his earlier school and loved by most of his fellow students and the teaching faculty alike. His penchant for mathematics and sciences has been regarded as one of the best in our previous town and has won him many accolades in the local Olympiad competitions. He represented his school in the national Olympiad competition as well. He is a straight “As” student, encompassing subjects such as humanities and arts, which is evident of his broad academic strengths that extend beyond maths and sciences.

Apart from academics, he has a plethora of interests in competitive sports such as baseball and badminton, business studies and entrepreneurship and extracurricular activities such as debating and hiking.

Once again, I humbly request your consideration for my son’s admission to your school for the upcoming term. I am sure he will be a wonderful addition to your student groups and will make your school proud.

Warm Regards,

Tracy McMahon

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, so, well, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 5.05154639175 297% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 937.175257732 156% => OK
No of words: 282.0 206.0 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17375886525 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98627251773 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 127.690721649 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59219858156 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 290.88556701 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8179562673 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.230769231 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 4.34317383033 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21407480663 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715956328906 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526138480247 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987275516694 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563357784453 0.0580467560999 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 41.2886597938 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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