Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, whiles others think that zoos are for both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.
Keeping animals in zoos has raised certain concern among the community whether it is a effective way to protect those wildlife species yet still bring entertaining and ecological benefits or it is an immoral method. In the scope of this essay, merits of both views will be throughly discussed.
On the one hand, having animals in the zoos definitely bring benefits to the animals as well as for the economy and educational system. Firstly, speaking from the conservative aspect, doing this can actually protect those creatures from extinction. It is prevalent in nature where thousands of species die out every day due to the shortage of food or proper care. For instance, there are some kinds of animals that are lack of nurturing skills and cannot take care of their off-spring carefully which is the main reason for the decline in the population. In this case, zoos with hundred of employees and experts in their field will help to maintain the health of these youngsters with specialized equipments and proper nutritional food at every developing stage to ensure the best condition for individuals. Secondly, as mentioned before, zoos employ large numbers of people and therefore create job opportunities and income for the area. The money raised can be use for conservation projects. Thirdly, zoos are not only fascinating and fun but also great visual tools for educational purpose. There is no better way to teach a child how to appreciate nature and wildlife than taking him to see the real creatures in their habitats.
On the other hand, those who consider zoos are wrong places to keep animals have their own points of views. It is obvious that zoos are artificial environments where wild species are constantly provided with food and eventually losing their instinct of predators . Thus, they might have to live in zoos forever and cannot make their ways to their initial societies. For example, a tiger which spent too much time in zoo might not know how to hunt for food due to the lack of teaching by his peers or his parents. In this way, he is likely to suffer higher chance of getting starving to death when he returns to his real habitat. Moreover keeping animals in cages is unethical. We have no right to use animals for entertainment or for the aim of making profit. Doing this will destroy and cause anxiety among these creatures. Imagine if we were kept in a box in a completely different society to where we suppose to be at with thousands of cameras and people pointing at us every single day, absolutely isolated from our peers, we would definitely go crazy one day.
In conclusion, the question of whether we should preserve animals in zoos or not still require a closer look from specialists as well as careful consideration of the government.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 475.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88421052632 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65257778007 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551578947368 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3048472839 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.476190476 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.619047619 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217938939448 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631051602072 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554413913913 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124475631444 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413327116963 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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