Historically human beings relied on animals for meat resources and clothing purposes. With the emerge of modern science, animals are also used for medical tests. Some people consider that highly developed technologies should release animals from the human demands of food, clothing and medicine. In my point of view, I partially agree with this opinion. Animals might become unnecessary for human clothing purposes. However, they are still essential in fulfilling our food and medical requirements.
Modern technology makes animals less important in providing clothing materials. In the past, people had no other choice but to derive some specific raw materials from animal skins, such as leather, wool or fur. Nevertheless, nowadays, artificial materials are so developed that completely replace the natural ones with better quality and lower costs. In this case, it is not necessary to use animals for the purpose of clothing. For example, the public tends to choose man-made leather or synthetic fur instead of real ones because they are more various in options and economical in prices. Furthermore, to avoid consuming the clothing and accessories made from animal parts also positively contributes to environmental protection. Hence, animals are innecessary and no longer required for human clothing needs.
On the other hand, animals are vital in the aspects of meat supply and medical research. Unlike animal hair or skins, which are not crucial for modern life, their meats are still irreplaceable as a nutrition provider. As we all know, only animal meats contain specific vitamins, elements and proteins that are primary for human health. Even synthetic heath-care medicines have to derive these nutritions from live animals. Moreover, animal tests are inevitable in medical researches. With 97% of the same DNA as human beings, animals are the only choice to ensure the safety of the newly developed medicines before they are applied to human beings. Scientific developments make lots of things possible, but in terms of food and medicine, humans still heavily depend on natural resources, including animals.
To sum up, in modern society, although people's dependence on animals for clothing diminishes, animals remain their importance and necessity in food supply and medical researches.
- In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food,clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience. 75
- Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime.To what extent do you agree? 89
- Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 58
- Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 84
- Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are some more important environmental problems.Discuss both these views and give your opinion. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...t resources and clothing purposes. With the emerge of modern science, animals are also use...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n food supply and medical researches.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, for example, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50985915493 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73343380839 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571830985915 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6405002123 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1428571429 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9047619048 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259492539646 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879591468132 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600123686501 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176899659763 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419437138437 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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