TPO 28- integrated writing - Peary's trip to the North Pole
The author of the reading passage believes that arctic expelorer named peary actually reached the north pole. Supporting his opinion he provided three reasons. The professor, however, rejects his arguments as follows.
To begin with, the writer of the reading passage states that a group of investigators of National Geographic Society conducted a research about the acurracy of the peary's records and claim, which accurately demonstrated that he was right about his claim. this, however is rebutted by the professor arguing that the committe was a couple of peary's friends in fact. therefore, they could not be considered as a creadible individuals to prove the accuracy of his claim. this is in direct contradiction to what the reading passage mentioned about the investigations on the peary's claim.
In addition, unlike the writer who maintains that the recent expedition on the north pole by Tom avery lasted less than 37 days which could be another proof to the accuracy of peary's claim, the lecturer is of the opinion that avery's expedition was far different from that of peary's. Simply because he is with an airplain which provided him with food supplies. therefore, avery's dogsled carried much less wiegh which led to more speed. this is also in sharp contrast to the reading reasoning regarding the same speed of dogsled used by both avery and peary.
Finally, while the writer asserts that the photographes which has been taken by peary can illustrate that he was actually in the north pole, the lecturer refutes this argument and points out that his primary camera was not able to take clear photos. We have just a few faded and blured photos whose pictures cannot tell us exactely where they were taken. Again this is another blow to the integrity of the arguments put forth by the author of the reading passage.
For these reasons, the lecturer dismisses the authors arguments as unconvincing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...f National Geographic Society conducted a research about the acurracy of the pearys record...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ated that he was right about his claim. this, however is rebutted by the professor a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...was a couple of pearys friends in fact. therefore, they could not be considered as a crea...
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Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...als to prove the accuracy of his claim. this is in direct contradiction to what the ...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... which provided him with food supplies. therefore, averys dogsled carried much less wiegh...
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Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...uch less wiegh which led to more speed. this is also in sharp contrast to the readin...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, in addition, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04100946372 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58544631261 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558359621451 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1813333833 49.2860985944 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.533333333 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376715762577 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108354159107 0.0996497079465 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826622596155 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186130341112 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856089008852 0.0443174109184 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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