Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">it goes without saying that all parents have a lot of concerns for their children to have a prosperous life in future. however, recently there has been an active controversy among many people over the very notion that whether in which time children were more dependent to their parents for making decision about their own life, in the past or today. although it is hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I personally adhere to the fact that in the past fathers and mothers played a crucial role in children's decision making. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">To start with, it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that over several centuries the family was of the paramount importance in societies. In other words, the foremost base in every community was the family. Hence, a family had the function of a government in small scale. As a result a children should obey all the commands that they get from parents. Because, it was their parents who provide them with all the necessities of life. An example can drive this notion home He had the dream to become an engineer, their parents however needed a labor force for their farm as they gained the revenue from agriculture. My grandfather had to leave away his hopes and desires in order to give a hand to his family.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">On the other hand, in today’s modern world where we live, not only are children supported by the special policies of the governments to continue their education in their field of interest, but also they will have access to all the opportunities to find a rewarding job and follow their dreams. having not any dependency to their family, juvenile are not under the pressure to obey their parents orders and wishes. Moreover, nowadays, children possess more independency due to they soon access to all sorts of media which make them acquainted with the other children’s life condition all around the word. Watching other children have some freedom they do not, they become eager to achieve all these sorts of liberties. they do all their efforts to make their personal decision deliberately, without any interference by their parents.
family:"Times New Roman",serif;mso-ascii-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">Drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, although what I mentioned above might not be generalizable to the whole context; there are always some exceptions excluded from the general rule, I do believe that children in today’s world have more freedom in decision making comparing to children in past centuries. Not only do people in the past have to obey their parents due to their economic dependency, but also youngsters, today have more independency and more information about their right for make personal decisions by their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, as a result, in other words, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2806.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1 4.8611393121 125% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.03645874668 2.67179642975 301% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517391304348 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.784966477 48.9658058833 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.888888889 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5555555556 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192963227677 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867071633276 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100243299601 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152991477478 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469566878622 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 11.7677419355 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.72 58.1214874552 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.4 10.9000537634 169% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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