Everyone wants to be happy with their lives. I disagree that job has a greater effect on one’s overall happiness than the social life does. I have two reasons about this which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, I live in Korea and my parents’ give me advice about life experience. They always say “High school friends go on forever, so if you make friends you should make friends carefully. Even though you have a good job, you always feel lonely and unhappy without friends. Hence, my opinion is even if you have a great job in no one admire your success except your parents.
Second, if you have many friends, you can meet your friends all day and when you have a big problems in your life you should talk about it with friends and then shake off one’s trouble. For example My father has a big problem his company. His friends gave him encouragement and it worked out the problem.
Overall, I think social life is happiness life more than job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...friends all day and when you have a big problems in your life you should talk about it w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, second, so, then, for example, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 52.1666666667 35% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 1977.66487455 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 176.0 407.700716846 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61363636364 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36666654542 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 212.727598566 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 618.680645161 40% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5872415004 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8181818182 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289702478823 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111282454041 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135799702175 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207346757953 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995391554286 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 86.8835125448 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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