People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do – rather than doing things they should do.
Everyone like to enjoy their lives. Each person has a unique way to enjoy her/his life. Sometimes some of these methods of enjoyment can be harmful. Some might be harmful, if we spend too much of time for those activities. These can cause us to forget important activities that we should do in order to have long lasting enjoyment. In this essay I will describe why people tend to neglect important things in their lives and follow personal enjoyment.
First and foremost, people try to get a small relaxation from their busy life. They search activities that give them instant happiness and personal enjoyment. With the advancement of human civilization, most of human activities have become complex and stressful. For example take a normal employee. He has to face many undesirable things in his working day. So moment of happiness is like a pond in a dessert. The man does not realize that this is a mirage. Therefore, he used to search personal enjoyment to get rid of stressful, arduous life. He forgets to allocate time to essential activities.
Second reason is, now the society has become more fun based than ever before. Today we have social medias, varies competitions, casinos, night club parties to get entertainment. These organizations are very clever in advertising and marketing, as a result they have good strategies to attract people towards them. They especially target the young generation, who has huge potential to contribute to development of the country and betterment of the world. Final result is people give their priority to time wasting personal enjoyment over much useful things which can help them to develop their carrier and long term happiness.
Finally, most important thing that we need to do are most of the time are unpleasant at the beginning. For example, try to remember your first math lesson or first class in learning a new language. This start is not easy. In contrast, learning to play new computer game is much easier and more fun. But what we need to realize is this fun is temporary. More important thing is long lasting happiness, but to get that you have to pay a price. That is hard working. But today people have become lazy and therefore they follow the path of personal enjoyment and neglect most important things that they need to do.
In conclusion, in my opinion, current society is more inclined towards personal happiness and give priority and allocate more time on those activities. Current busy life of human, spread of entertainment medias and there strategic marketing have played an important role in worsening the situation. On the other hand thing we should do are not pleasant and they give results much slowly. Due to all these facts people today spends much of their time in search for mirage of personal happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'Those cans'?
Suggestion: This can; Those cans
... too much of time for those activities. Those can cause to forget us important activities...
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Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'forgetting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: forgetting
...e for those activities. Those can cause to forget us important activities that we should ...
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Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...that we should to in order to have long term enjoyment. In this essay I will describ...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...does not realize that this is a mirage. Therefore he used to search personal enjoyment to...
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Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'target'
Suggestion: target
...ct people towards them. They especially targets the young generation, who has huge pote...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93191489362 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64891822604 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502127659574 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6716950753 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4375 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6875 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40625 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325712337477 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693147748629 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899865068203 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179574723195 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625969187529 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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