"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
The author concludes that the decline in listeners is because of their current format of rock music which is not the taste of the new residents that have increased the popultion growth of that area where the wwac is broadcasted hence, the author suggests to change their show format, also as their has been a decline in sales of recorded music record he recomends it is better to convert it into news and talk shows.
The author reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology.
To justify the conclusion, the author reasons that the new transferred residents to the area are retired persons and they should change the whole format according to their taste to grab more listeners. however, on deeper scrutiny it is realised that none of the evidences provide credible support to the conclusion given by the author . hence, the argument can be considered incomplete.
First of all the argument readily assumes that the population growth in the area should be directly proportional to the increase in the listeners of the show. this is merely based on assumptions and no solid grounds.For instance, the population that has grown are not found of listing to such shows and channels they may prefer their own gadgets that give the taste of songs and other entertainment sources that they want hence, the assumption that the population growth should lead to growth in listeners of the show is not well stated and hence changing the format of the show wont help increase the listeners if the above example is true. hence, the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated that the population that has increased have been surveyed and they are fond listing to shows like wwac then it would have been a well stated evidence.
the author also claims that the new residents that have been transferred are retired persons hence, to get more listener they should switch to the taste of music they prefer. this again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate any clear relation with increase in number of listeners as there is no survey or data provided that the new transfers are really interested in these kinds of shows or they prefer other sources for that purpose hence it useless to change the format of the show without proper collection of information.if the argument provided evidence that the new retired residents are looking for the music they like then it would have been a better evidence.hence this evidence does a little.
Finally the author notes that the recent decline in recorded music suggest that people do not prefer music hence they should change the format to a talk show and news show to increase the listeners.however on careful scrutiny it reveals that this evidence is not useful. to illustrate lets say what if the new residents already have a collection of recorded music or the recorded music been sold is not prefered by the new residents hence, the decline in music records have been noticed thus, relating decline in music records to changing the format and assuming the new residents prefer news and talk show is irrelevant and useless this would not help increase the listeners of the show. therefore the author needs to provide convincing evidences to the reader to support the conclusion nor the reader is left with the thinking that the authors claims are made more of wishful thinking rather than substantive evidences.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 579 350
No. of Characters: 2804 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.905 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 64.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.326 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.497 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.85 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.183 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...se of their current format of rock music which is not the taste of the new reside...
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...ted hence, the author suggests to change their show format, also as their has b...
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...ce, the author suggests to change their show format, also as their has been a de...
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...es of recorded music record he recomends it is better to convert it into news and...
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... The author reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminolo...
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... to their taste to grab more listeners. however, on deeper scrutiny it is realised that...
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...rgument can be considered incomplete. First of all the argument readily assume...
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...sed on assumptions and no solid grounds.For instance, the population that has grown...
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...tance, the population that has grown are not found of listing to such shows and c...
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...itch to the taste of music they prefer. this again is a weak and unsupported claim a...
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...in recorded music suggest that people do not prefer music hence they should chang...
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...veals that this evidence is not useful. to illustrate lets say what if the new res...
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...how is irrelevant and useless this would not help increase the listeners of the s...
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...elp increase the listeners of the show. therefore the author needs to provide convincing ...
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...elp increase the listeners of the show. therefore the author needs to provide convincing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2850.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 578.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93079584775 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57612147852 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.377162629758 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.0 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 22.8473053892 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.381762012 57.8364921388 262% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 219.230769231 119.503703932 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 44.4615384615 23.324526521 191% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 5.70786347227 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184008596116 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738491295373 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065202250184 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102318253338 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742128891326 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 14.3799401198 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.28 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 12.197005988 158% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.6 11.1389221557 176% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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