The author of this statement asserts governments must ensure that major cities should receive the financial support they need thrive. And reason behind this assertion is that cities are the own in which culture and traditions are preserved. At first the claim and reason behind it seems to be valid but if we go on depth and analyze it, I found the both claim and reason invalid. And reasons for my disagreement are below.
Cities are obviously the heart of the country and most of them are already in developed stage. Governments should rather focus on the rural part of country which is under developing and I think it’s the rural are where more cultural tradition are preserved. If rural area receive financial support to preserved and maintain cultural tradition then it would be beneficial to both people of rural area and nation. For instance, in country like Nepal where developed cities are meager than rural area, cultural tradition can be seen best in rural areas. Cities area are filled with people from different culture and they are so busy on their own schedule that they do not have time to preserve culture and tradition.
As mention above, if rural area are provided financial support to preserve the cultural tradition then it can attract many internal and national tourist which will help to uplift the economic condition of villagers. Many unemployed young people can get job within their village and chances of losing capable young generation would be very less. This would directly or indirectly help the nation's economics state. With ability of high preservation and diversity of culture and tradition would lead nation to be known worldwide for culture.
But, its not that the cities are not important to preserve culture and traditions. Government should not be prejudiced and provide financial support to both of the areas. Its just that government should be focused more on rural areas as rural area are the one where people are preserving cultures. If government did not focus on it now then there is possibilities that it would be lost and remained only in papers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...s would directly or indirectly help the nations economics state. With ability of high p...
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Line 4, column 6, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...o be known worldwide for culture. But, its not that the cities are not important t...
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Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are possibilities'?
Suggestion: there are possibilities
...government did not focus on it now then there is possibilities that it would be lost and remained only...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 352.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98295454545 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51431850024 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485795454545 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0393405156 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.176470588 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367111107918 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124377643268 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969345557216 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227816679663 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970522627134 0.0667264976115 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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