"According to the recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the content of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the people through advertising."
As the saying goes, united we stand, divided we fall"; one man cannot singlehandedly do anything as a leader by working in silo. Students attending schools with an overall total based grading system tend to horde knowledge and information from their peers in a bid to get a higher score and win prizes. Annoying habits like this causes separation, bitterness and hatred among students, this act, when practiced for a long time becomes part of the students and over the years, the student relies only on his own knowledge, wisdom and understanding for decision-making.
Relating this to becoming a good leader, training a child to win by competing all his life is sure to lead to a social disconnection as the constant habit of always wanting to compete with others will repel people. A good leader is one who listens to his followers. From the popular saying, “no man is an island of Knowledge", there will always be need for a leader be it in government, industry or other fields to consult with his cabinet members or executive members. Some followers have more knowledge and experience in some areas and their advice could come in handy and help the leader make quality decisions.
Furthermore, institutions in the educational sector should emphasize equal grading system. They should design a grading scale that allows students work as a team and introduce in the educational system. Also, schools should encourage students who partake in group study, include group practical in curriculum to encourage group study and a team bonding session.
In conclusion, our society would produce more effective leader if we realign the educational sector to allow co-operation and team work among people. This way, we would be able to meet an all-round success in all ramifications.
- "According to the recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by the movie reviewers about specific Super Scr 16
- THE FOLLOWING IS TAKEN FROM A MEMO FROM THE ADVERTISING DIRECTOR OF SUPERSCREEN MOVIE PRODUCTION COMPANY“ACCORDING TO A RECENT REPORT FROM OUR MARKETING DEPARTMENT, DURING THE PAST YEAR, FEWER PEOPLE ATTENDED SUPERSCREEN PRODUCED MOVIES THAN IN ANY OTHE 37
- Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another. 83
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
- Over the past year, our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weathe 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...training a child to win by competing all his life is sure to lead to a social dis...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 294.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91841491803 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608843537415 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5223464106 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.75 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0277161714696 0.243740707755 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00976755261169 0.0831039109588 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0146936514897 0.0758088955206 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0167366213309 0.150359130593 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101834166077 0.0667264976115 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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