While a sense of competition can definitely bring out the best from someone, it is usually through cooperation we can succeed in a society.
The modern human society is so diverse that it is virtually impossible to be a omniscient. Although , all cows or animals need the same skills as their compatriots, humans need complementing skills and characterstics to succeed. Can we imagine a society with all doctors ? With all farmers ? Yuval Harari in his books Sapiens, has stated the biggest advantage we have as humans is our ability to cooperate. I could not agree more with Yuval and I agree with the statement's emphasis on cooperation to succeed.
Let us take an example of Uber or a hotel booking website OYO. Uber has no taxis to its name and OYO has no hotels to its name, but with a business model built out of cooperation they are one of the biggest companies. Similarly, in government and other field , most of the time there will be opposing factions but the best way out is through competition.
Although cooperation can be a good lesson for the young mind, having no critics or criticism can be complacent. For example if there is a debate in a school and all students work hard to find good evidence for one side of the arguement and, there are no opposing or counter views they might be a smug to think they are good debaters. Sense of competition is required to check one's position with another.
We can always argue if the world would be the same without the two great wars. Definitely they were devastating in nature but most of the major advancement in this age - internet , nuclear power plant etc-- were developed through a sense of competition during the war. Examples like these can be used to challenge my postion for the need of cooperation rather than competiton.
Although I agree to the statement, I have to qualify its dichotomous nature. Young people need to learn a sense of competition as well, as the real world is not quite amenable. I would agree if the prompt stated "Instilling a sense of cooperation to young people can be beneficial but they would need a sense a competition to succeed further."
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- Buying a Franchise 76
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be 58
- A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re 65
- The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries. 58
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.3162921348 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74933333333 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85685380385 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8708581546 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7368421053 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140966284118 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430682798791 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448394500449 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748594731079 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540003813133 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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