The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by Hoangnhi on Thu, 11/14/2019 - 08:26

The pie charts compare 2 different nations in terms of spending money on consumer households in 5 categories in 2010.

Overall, both countries had differences in expending for necessary things in daily routines. It could be clearly seen that the Japanese paid money most for goods and services (29%) of the total. While living place is the top priority of Malaysian. Particularly, housing accounted for 34% - the highest percentage among the categories shown. The second percentage of expenditure in Japan was food at 24%, compared with 27% in Malaysia. In Japan, the third proportion of expenditure was housing ( 21%), but the third percentage in Malaysia was other goods and services at 26%. Transport came in fourth place in Japan, accounting for a fifth, while in Malaysia the actual percentage was higher at one in ten.

Noticeably, health care which plays an integral part in human life is considered at least in both Japan and Malaysia at 6% and 3%, respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...or goods and services 29% of the total. While living place is the top priority of Mal...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd proportion of expenditure was housing 21%, but the third percentage in Malaysi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, third, while, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09375 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85463027518 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64375 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.13660004 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5555555556 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158872746122 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625658609366 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581863995033 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117856485772 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154339354718 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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