TPO 40: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's world parents have a significant concern about how to act with their offspring which leads to best result in their future. While some people believe that parents should pay some money to their children for each high grade they attain in school, the others hold the view that the children should intersted in studying their courses and offer the money to them have a counter effect. Personally, I am of the former group's point of view. The reasons substantiating my standpoint will be explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, suggesting money to the juveniles acts as driving force for encouraging them to study harder. To elaborate, needless to say that every person needs some motivation to conduct a task completely; and this reason is doubly important for the youngsters. Because they are in an age that fond of playing with their peers and make friends with the other gender. So, they pay less attention to their courses and offering the money entices them into studying hard. As a result, they unintentionally make a prosper future for themselves.
Moreover, when the offspring have their own income they learn how to manage their money to buy whatever they want and also learn how hard to earn money. To elucidate, everybody should learn their personal economical stuff and it should be taught to the children in low ages. So, if the children earn money they control their money for buying the stuff which they need and also they become familiar with the difficulties which every person may face in the gain of income. Therfore, it is a good practice for their future life.
As shown above, considering all the reasons and the points mentioned, one could conclude that the parrents should suggests money to their children for each good results which they attain. It is because they not only are encourage to study hard for get a high grade but also learn some economical subjects which is necessary for their prosperity in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the best'.
Suggestion: to the best
...to act with their offspring which leads to best result in their future. While some peop...
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Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... As a result, they unintentionally make a prosper future for themselves. Moreover, when...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'suggest'
Suggestion: suggest
...could conclude that the parrents should suggests money to their children for each good r...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...attain. It is because they not only are encourage to study hard for get a high grade but ...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
... is because they not only are encourage to study hard for get a high grade but also lear...
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Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...which is necessary for their prosperity in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, while, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89085545723 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48174301445 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519174041298 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7538239844 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.533333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299623123206 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102132292933 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721001046077 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201901950626 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390252142024 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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