tpo 46 using electronic medical records rather than paper-based records
The professor casts doubt on the reading's idea that electronic medical record systems have many advantages. She asserts that the benefits are uncertain.
Firstly, according to the passage, the electronic systems can lower the costs for storing and transferring medical records, but the professor argues that the cost reduction is not significant, because the paper records won't be thrown up and are kept for the sake of emergency needs like signature. In the end, the storage cost compromises the cost reduction.
Secondly, the passage states that saving medical records on computers can avoid errors, however, the professor claims that it cannot eliminate the errors. It is because the medical records are usually at first written on paper and then interpreted into the computer. Poor hand writing or wrong interpretation can still cause errors.
Thirdly, the passage points out that electronic records can aid medical research by providing large amounts of patient data. On the contrary, the professor demonstrates that the United States has strict rules to protect the privacy of patients. It is difficult to have the permission to access the data.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trates that the United States has strict rules to protect the privacy of patients...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 995.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 184.0 270.72406181 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40760869565 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 4.04702891845 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68989897105 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 71.2780471113 49.2860985944 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468179589153 0.272083759551 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155861487871 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133289798935 0.0662205650399 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263357670927 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287006417818 0.0443174109184 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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