Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Often, youngsters receive advices such as "follow your dreams" or "follow your heart" but every person is different and therefore their goals will be different.
It is very common in youngsters to pick unworthy goals with the plethora of options out in the real world. Without proper guidance if they are set free to do what they want, they might end up wasting time on unworthy things while they could have used that time to develop themselves in some other field which is right for them. So, it is quite significant for youngsters to seek advice of experienced people before picking out goals because they might not always have enough information to make a proper decision.
Once they are furnished with all the information, enough to think about the pros and cons in their field of interest, they can choose their dream otherwise they might end up in a field that is not right for them.
While this advice seems to be innocuous , in some cases it may have completely unexpected consequences. For example, if there is a person with a slight bullying attitude and if that person is told to follow his/her heart then he/she might end up hurting someone and eventually himself/herself. It would be wrong to go to a criminal minded person and ask him/her to follow his/her dreams, that would lead to some serious repercussions. Hence it is important to be aware of a person's state of mind, before injecting any ideas into his/her mind through advices.
Hence, in my view I agree to the saying , "Follow your dreams" but only after meticulous research about that dream.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s such as 'follow your dreams' or 'follow your heart' but eve...
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Suggestion: ,
... While this advice seems to be innocuous , in some cases it may have completely un...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...uld lead to some serious repercussions. Hence it is important to be aware of a person...
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Suggestion: ,
... Hence, in my view I agree to the saying , 'Follow your dreams' but only...
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Line 8, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...;Follow your dreams' but only after meticulous research about that dream.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, in my view, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 2235.4752809 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 271.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92250922509 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75334123866 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586715867159 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5674151229 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.4 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 5.21951772744 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211741701349 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089013388074 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121145075957 0.0758088955206 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149489072896 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146112865518 0.0667264976115 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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