Many parents do not want their kids to watch ads in the media because they think the content might not be age-appropriate. I personally do not entirely agree with the idea that advertising aimed at children should be prohibited, and I will explain why in this essay.
On the one hand, I agree that children can be manipulated by advertisers who are smart enough to take advantage of their immaturity and innocence. Not only on TV, advertisements pop up everywhere, on computers, hand-held devices or even on the main gates of many kindergarten schools. As children easily expose to those forms of advertising, they may persuade their parents to buy some certain products while they do not really need them. In behavioral terms, children may become unreasonable and demanding if their parents cannot afford a product which is routinely advertised as a must-have. Besides, some manufacturers intriguingly describe their products as useful and essential while the reverse effects can be foreseen, namely junk food and video games.
Nonetheless, I incline to the view that banning advertisements aimed at children will not completely solve the problem. Firstly, advertising has become ubiquitously and universally available while parents cannot spend all their time with their children. Instead, they should teach their children the nature and purposes of advertising so that the youngsters themselves know how to distinguish real needs from those induced. Moreover, a prohibition on such activity might jeopardize commercial revenues of various businesses, ranging from product manufacturers to advertising agencies. In terms of financial benefits, we should also consider jobs and incomes of many people who might be affected by a restriction relating to advertising.
Overall, I believe that any unscrupulous commercial activities must be banned, but advertising aimed at young viewers might be acceptable if watched with parental guidance and the content is strictly controlled.
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- Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...roduct which is routinely advertised as a must-have. Besides, some manufacturers intriguing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52459016393 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13839860773 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.681744608 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.615384615 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309840837385 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110303087264 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730987822529 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202360335084 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531659840503 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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