The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying at IT university from 1985-2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying at IT university from 1985-2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Diyora on Wed, 12/18/2019 - 05:11

The line below gives information about the number of male and female students studying at it university from 1985 to 2015. And it is given with numbers.

The graph is showing that the amount of male students are more than amount of girls between this period. For instance, until 2010 both lines only increased but after that the amount of female students diminished.

In 1985 male students were 5000 and during 10 years this line picked up sharply however then until 2010 the line increased slowly, also further in 2015 it was 40000.

In 1985 very small number of female students studied in IT university but after 1990 this line maintained improving, to make it clear increasing. But this slow improving continued only until 2010 also picked up to 33000 students even so after this year line sharply reduced and changed to 28000 in 2015.

It is clear that number of male students are more than count of girls nevertheless, this both lines were growing together nearly 25 years.

Accordingly if government will pay attention to the educating of women this amount will raise in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...il 2010 also picked up to 33000 students even so after this year line sharply red...
^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Accordingly,
...re growing together nearly 25 years. Accordingly if government will pay attention to the...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, even so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94117647059 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35859796438 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3988168542 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.23603664747 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249695785311 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123147468557 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143542050789 0.0843802449381 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144876044685 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133048305408 0.0819641961636 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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