The use of violence in music lyrics, video games and films seen by children is causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young people?
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi">promoting violence by singers, computer games and movies among young people has raised concerns in many societies. we will discuss the most serious problems arising, and also two ways in which the worries can be allayed.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">Arguably the gravest problem caused by adopting violence in programs which children are expose to them is to breed juvenile delinquents who certainly have ill effects on the society. these children seem to be more susceptible group of community to be persuade to commit criminal actions. A further serious impact is the disruption to their relationships, especially with their peers and family. they may ultimately become aggressive and offensive, so that their ability to sustain relationships with both their circle of friends and family members will drastically curtailed. The long term consequences of this issue may include depression, isolation and academic underperformance. Thus, we can argue that developing violence in programs which are aim at children may be detrimental.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">To counteract theses dangers, perhaps the most effective and most immediate remedy would be for government and politicians to ban promoting brutality in such programs. For example, members of parliament may pass a law in order to control strictly these kind of programs, as is being suggested in Iran. this would less the anxiety of breading young criminals and prevent them from being persuaded to commit crime. Another solution may be to encourage parents to strictly control their children needs, so that they can learn safely and boost their knowledge using nonviolent programs. Instigating these measures will possible dispel all concerns.
family:"Times New Roman","serif";mso-ascii-theme-font: major-bidi;mso-hansi-theme-font:major-bidi;mso-bidi-theme-font:major-bidi; mso-bidi-language:FA">In conclusion, the main problems seem to be breeding crime and potential relationship breakdown. The key solution would be implementation of censorship policy and strict family control on children requirements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 7.52159468439 5.12529762239 147% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.5125791809 2.80592935109 375% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607973421927 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.2 1.60771543086 137% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.4656332555 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.933333333 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108571707887 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593587017553 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379179894709 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851192471891 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257830365706 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 13.0946893788 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 0.42 50.2224549098 1% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.2 11.3001002004 161% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 26.34 12.4159519038 212% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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