Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
children are a crucial part of our society. children are affected by several factor that form their personality in future. Some people believe that parents should allocate their time to play and have fun with their children, while others hold an opposite view and assert the best use of time for parents is that help their children solving their problem in schoolwork. In my opinion, parents should spend their time to amuse and play games or sports with their children for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that when children and their parents play game together, this help them to increase their self-confidence significantly. The majority of children are shy and avoid to communicate with older person. when their parents involve with them into playing game and amusing, they can connect to real world with older individuals. As over time, this impact on self-confidence of children indirectly because they learn how to behave better. For instance, when I was 8 years old, I had a lot of issues in elementary school. Unfortunately, I feared my teachers that cause me not to like school. school counselor suggested my parent that they should deal with me more than the past. they decided to spend leisure time to play with me. At first, I was anxious about how to play with them. As over time, when I notice I could communicate with them, I never fear about my teachers. In addition, this increasing self-confidence lead me to like school and progress quickly. As you can see, playing children with their parents have positive role in their schooling.
Another reason is that when children play with their parents, creativity of them rise noticeably. All children have special ability to do any-work but it is disguising. The best way to thrive this potential is that children involve with real world such as playing with older person, especially their parents. parents have more experience than children and they can guide their children for flourishing their capability. For example, when I was in preschool, I could not do my artifact in spit of my cleverness. my father was really worry about this event that I would confront problem in future. After he read an article about how increase the creativity of children, he noticed that he should spend his time to play complex puzzle with me. At the beginning, I became frustrated and tired due to the fact I could not arrange it. However, my father guided me circuitous way influencing my creativity. As over time, I could do all puzzles myself. this really helped me in preschool. this experience taught me that parents have vital factor to rise children's creativity.
In conclusion, if parents want to help their children, they should play game with them. Not only do they increase their children's self-confidence, but they also rise their children's creativity. All parent should dedicate their time for play with children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 91.0 43.0788530466 211% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0206185567 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7084858167 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445360824742 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.338679919 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5483870968 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6451612903 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09677419355 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376865265222 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107287185971 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936136989935 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275243979856 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783434451581 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.