A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter:

- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

- say how you think the company should spend some money

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to give feedback on your Company’s decision to spend money on Children’s sports team or on open-air concerts.

Sponsoring the children’s team would bring them a plethora of high-quality equipment’s and help them improve the quality of games they play. This will also help our community to get more attention on national levels in near future.

As far as I know, we have never saw an open-air concert in our community and I believe this event will be an amazing experience. It will give a chance to get together and listen to mesmerizing music with family and friends. This event will also help local talents to learn and perform in concerts.

I think it will be a wise decision to spend money on both, and instead of sponsoring the team for two years, you can sponsor for one year and organize one open-air concert to make it even.

I hope you will consider my feedback.

Yours faithfully,

Tom Morrison.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 33, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...e. As far as I know, we have never saw an open-air concert in our community an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92255843211 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2404223604 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240381221999 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825205990777 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993213448391 0.0603063233224 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133875595605 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115988609804 0.0580467560999 200% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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