Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
There have been several disputed discussion on whether playing games on a computer is a waste of time or not. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question. Personally, I believe that a young one should not be allowed to play computer games. I feel this for two reasons; which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the first reason is decreasing in the overall grade in the school; furthermore, playing computer games will affect productivity, efficiency towards school work. My personal example experience is a compelling example of this; about ten years ago, I found maths very difficult, thus, I enrolled in the math class, Initially, I gave much time to math and which lead to scoring good in inter-term math exam; due to my outstanding performance in maths, my father gifted me a computer; afterwards I gave my whole time to my computer where I played lot of games which results, I scored very low in final exam especially very low marks in math. Therefore, I learned that playing computer games will decline your overall grade in the school.
Secondly, the second reason is health issue especially affect children eyes the most; moreover, During the young period, children should do outdoor activities, so as to keep the body healthy. For better understanding, let us take the metaphor of my cousin brother; during his initial age, he was very fond of computer games. He gave almost 6-7 hours to computer games which I felt should give to study. As he grew up, he found his eyes were dries and felt very painful. Later, In his medical reports, it was shown that due to excessive use of the computer, his eyesight was diminished; thus, children should not play computer games and it will affect your organs in the later period.
In conclusion, although some are advising that one can play the computer games but not in an excessive manner, nonetheless, I am of the opinion that young birds should not play the computer games; this is because it will affect his school grades and because it will affect the health of the children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 161, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... children should do outdoor activities, so as to keep the body healthy. For better under...
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Line 17, column 88, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excessive manner" with adverb for "excessive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...one can play the computer games but not in an excessive manner, nonetheless, I am of the opinion that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, as to, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82681564246 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59960288229 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527932960894 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.198570961 48.9658058833 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 132.923076923 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5384615385 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 5.45110844103 200% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371521676495 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141435156891 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117756640047 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240291013418 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707028127118 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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