Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?
Obesity is now one of the main causes of preventable death, especially in industrialised countries. To tackle this problem governments can reduce the impact of their overweight citizens by the careful use of taxation to fund alternatives to a sedentary lifestyle. However, individuals should also take responsibility for their own health by avoiding a bad diet and taking the initiative to participate in sport.
It is important for governments to act quickly to curb obesity because of the rising death rate. There will also be rising costs in healthcare and the benefits system if it is left unchecked. To combat this problem, governments should, first of all, heavily tax junk food and use the revenue generated to subsidise healthy fruit and vegetables. This would make healthy food cheaper and more widely available than unhealthier options. Also, the government can act by funding leisure centers, sports, clubs and gyms. This money could be used to help people gain motivation to exercise and become more active.
On the other hand, there are those who claim that obesity is due to lifestyle choice and therefore an individual, not one for the government. They claim that people should find their own motivation to prevent obesity by being aware of the potentially fatal consequences of their lifestyles. Individuals could also change their diets by switching from a carbohydrate-heavy diet to one which includes a balance of vitamins and minerals.
In conclusion, although individuals may be able to help themselves by changing their diets and activities, it may require government intervention to tackle obesity quickly and on a large scale.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'benefits'' or 'benefit's'?
Suggestion: benefits'; benefit's
...o be rising costs in healthcare and the benefits system if it is left unchecked. To comb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29924242424 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03919150962 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598484848485 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4297586983 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.615384615 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168255623447 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584979337997 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390571787909 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101457127084 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315924724358 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.