With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (physical education or cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, young people are put under pressure of succeeding in the academic fields to guarantee a promising position and decent salaries in multinational companies. As might be expected, many universities are setting new departments that offer job-oriented courses or expanding existing ones to enhance their enrollment, which leads to a growing doubt whether to eliminate the non-academic subjects like physical education and cookery from the curriculum or not. As far as I am concerned, this lopsided idea is not justified.
Career prospect is on most people's mind when choosing a major, but this can hardly justify the overemphasis on certain disciplines. First of all, education aims to improve one’s all-round abilities. For example, a student can do their best with a good foundation in terms of health, spirit and practical skills. Obviously, fitness helps us stay energetic to perform more precisely and relaxation refreshes our mind to make room for ingenious ideas. In addition to this, by dint of learning cookery, ones can take care of themselves when living far from their family. It is short-sighted to concentrate on certain subjects that are in great demand.
Another reason worth considering is that having professional skills is not the only thing valued by employers. To maintain their competitiveness and vitality, employers are increasingly bored with those graduates who only have rigid theoretical knowledge. Because of this, that students are made to spend all their times studying mathematics or languages to get a high-paid job is inappropriate. In Vietnam, for instance, thousands of students majoring in Accounting, Finance, International Trade, Law fail to get employed.
To recapitulate, this groundless emphasis will damage both individual and society at large. Each subject is just as important as any other. One can excel in any field if he is dedicated enough.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Law) must be used with a third-person verb: 'fails'.
Suggestion: fails
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44932432432 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12657374544 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.699324324324 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4075003266 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.8125 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197972899818 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502713523803 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542388145224 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106181686419 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814423473779 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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