In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the disadvantages and advantages for young people who decide to do this.
Young people are encouraged to spend a year working, traveling or volunteering before embarking on universities. Taking a gap year between the high school and the university has become a quite ubiquitous option in some countries. As far as I am concerned, while they could gain a variety of benefits by doing kind of this trend, there are some detrimental drawbacks for young people who choose to do this.
There are several reasons why I would agree to take this break. Because of the fact that skyrocketing tuition and accommodation fees have been sharply increasing, saving money is a primary advantage of this. By taking intellectually challenging jobs, students can save up money and learn to apply their knowledge to real lives in advance. Even pure manual work can cultivate student’s diligence, discipline and strong will. What’s more, students who have spent more time making ends meet and travelling tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges in student life.
However, there are some certain dangers in taking time off at that important period. Adolescents may end up never returning to their study or finding it difficult to re-adapt to an academic environment. Most work as salesperson, which not only exhausts them physically, but also interferes with their study. In addition, there are adequate grants and scholarships setting aside to alleviate the financial burden of underprivileged students.
To recapitulate, despite some negative aspects, it is apparent that pre-university jobs and travelling will broaden youngsters’ horizons and prepare them to step out of the Ivory Tower and into the real world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: Because
...s why I would agree to take this break. Because of the fact that skyrocketing tuition and accommodation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, while, in addition, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28723404255 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07824499903 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0421706912 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.692307692 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246614417592 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730383941737 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889876729453 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141961346516 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16329710952 0.056905535591 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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