Nowadays people tend to change a few careers during their life. What are the reasons for this, in your opinion? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole?
A career shift is significant nowadays to cope up with the challenging environment. For thrilling experience, recession, natural calamity, terror attacks, unsatisfied employer are some of the reasons for career change. It is useful for the society as the career change help to have more professional in innovative technologies.
Working in a same field for a long time makes people to try for an interesting and different field. People are enriched with inventing ideas which make them to change for competitive field. Moreover, due to recession, people lose their permanent job. So they are under pressure to find a safe career. In addition, natural calamity like drought, flood make farmer to focus other business rather than farming. Besides, terrorist attack which affects many careers and also one of the reasons for the change in career. Furthermore, unsatisfied employer abuses the unproductive employee with heavy work load which leads to career shift. Stress due to heavy work or less time spent with the family or earning low salary, which cause to career change. Better opportunity in another field is also the main reason for the career change. It would be quite challenging and need extra effort for success in that new field.
It is useful for the society to have a balance profession on the other new fields like biotechnology, plant mutation, scientific research, etc.
In a nutshell, career change is unavoidable as discussed various reasons contribute it. It is safe to try for a different career and earn a large income. It is an exciting experience to learn a new career.
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A career shift is significant nowadays to cope up with the challenging environment. From thrilling experience, escape from a stressful job, huge vacancy and income are some of the reasons for career change. It is useful for the society as the career change help to have more professional in innovative technologies.
People who have been working in a career for many years make them boring. People will find try something adventurous and interesting career. For example, a management person faces his job as monotonous as he has to manage people daily which make them to try for thrilling job like developing software. It is clear that repetitive and tiresome job field is a reason for the career change for many people.
Moreover, some fields are stressful and due to heavy work load which would cause to change career. People will not find time to spend with their family. For example, Software Engineers in India are working hard day and night to develop software and to meet their deadline in projects. Due to more working time and heavy work pressure to complete their task, people would switch to another career.
In addition, for better opportunity and large people would change career. They feel that their career has less job opening. So changing high demanding vacancy field will help them to get a higher salary. For example, a software trainer who teaches software to the student would switch to a software development job as it contains more opening than their field of teaching.
In a nutshell, career change is unavoidable as discussed various reasons contribute it. It is safe to try for a different career and earn a large income. It is an exciting experience to learn a new career and lead to prosperous society.
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Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2: First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
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Para 5: Conclusion.
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