Topic: In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? disagree?
That fauna species are harnessed as sources of materials for human consumption such as eating, wearing and curing diseases remains a source of controversy. From my perspective, I partially disagree to the statement that no longer are animals essential to be sacrificed for those activities.
On the one hand, human demands may be satisfied without animals’ overexploitation. The more developed are clinical techniques, the fewer animals are killed for medical purposes. For instance, a large amount of pain-killing drugs packaged in whether capsule or tablet derive from man-made materials instead of animal materials. Similarly, although many pants and shirts are made from cotton or synthetic materials, they are cost-effective in price and lucrative in design, which explicitly meets the demands of most city-dwellers.
On the other hand, it is discernible that animals play a inevitable role in meeting human’s varied demands. First and foremost, one plausible rationale which needs to be taken into account is that it is impossible to force everyone to become a vegetarian, fruitarian or breatharian rather than consuming greasy, lean meat, steak pie and fried chicken, which whet people’s appetite. Additionally, research has shown that animal products include a high proportion of protein, the deficiency of which may pose a threat to one’s fitness and growth. As a prime illustration, if an athlete whose daily intake contains all five main types of food partakes in a race, he will gain a competitive advantage with strong muscles over those eating cauliflower, broccoli and cereals. Secondly, some privileged individuals from affluent families in Vietnam would prefer woolen sweaters made of leathers, tailor-made long silk dress or luxurious jewelry like pearls, which obliquely demonstrate their superiority to others.
To be brief, although other products may substitute for animal products, the merits of utilizing animal products is undeniable such as providing inhabitants with nutritious food, superior jewelry and clothes which represent high living standards.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 56, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74203821656 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11298198224 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68152866242 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3811964844 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.25 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125361615434 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487593358493 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568046849741 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886844157191 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468018466166 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.71 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.