Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
1. Joining a sports team
2. Participate in community activities
3. Traveling
making new friends is a very challenging matter for all people, especially youngsters and students. there are different ways to become familiar with a new person. The opinions are divided to whether as joining a sport team, participating in community activities or traveling would be the best strategies to find new mates. when it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that the benefits of traveling in order to get aquainted with other people are higher than other mentioned options. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, students who travels to different regions, provinces or even different contries bring about with lot of challenges. In order to solve these difficulties, they have to deal with strangers and talk to them, explan their challenge and ask them ther helping hands. I will bring an example to illuminate this subject. Consider a group of students who are going to visits a historical site in an other city for a class project. During this journey, members have the opportunity to know each other better and even in some cases establish rapport. In that historical, they required to gather information from knowledgeable vistors. thus they have to approach them and start a conversation. these purposeful speeches could be the start of an itimate relationship. As you can see, a travel will increase the chance of making potential friendships.
The second reason behind my standpoint is rooted in the fact that atmosphere of a journey is very favorable and pleasant for students and people. they are more delightful. it goes without saying, In their ongoing life, people and especially students have a hectic daily schedule and do not motivated or prepared enough for finding new friends. Trip is kind of escapism for students, as a result they have the chance to relieve their stresses and unwind. thus they are ready for finding new friends.
In brief, I believe that traveling is the best means of establishing a new relationship with other persons.since not only people have more chances to start a conversation with others but also they have more readiness to accept a new buddy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, in brief, kind of, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00273224044 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81575637792 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560109289617 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8186973465 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.55 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233318233904 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615438970801 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655931754581 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137693251891 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758254338626 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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